Interesting work I've to communicate to my colleagues of the Media Engineering Institute
About the substance of this work, the text line 57-70 about DACD seems too long, revealing that may be you need to complete the well-explained strategic objectives by explaining the research questions. I suggest to undertake and extract the "media engineering" issues related to communication/mediation and UX design (e.g. about this feeling of motion, does the design really make the difference? what are the principles of UX design that are at the basis of the thoughts? etc). By the way, the expression "science mediation" may be confused with "scientific mediation".
About the writing:
line 36: "public school" to be in italic
line 54: "principles" plural
line 81: GoeWall -> GeoWall
line 97: "has chosen ..." -> reformulate the sentence, it is not clear
line 100: the station? you mean the GeoWall?
line 101: "ans" -> "and"
line 105: "that has been studied"
line 105: "the project" -> "a research project"
line 109: "informative ... information" -> a bit redundant
line 109: "The back ..." -> reformulate, it's not clear what is the role of the milling machine in relation to the scientific data element (may be use an illustration?)
figure 1 legend: wireframe has no minus in the middle (slideshow neither)
figure 1 legend: "while on the right" (you write two times "on the left")
line 116: use the complete acronym you introduce line 103 "UN-SDG"
line 144: "OpenLayers" plural
line 149: reformulate, trough or through ?
line 149: may be introduce a little diagram to have a quick view on the structure on the data model
line 161 vs line 163: reproducibility or repeatability?